now that i look what i edited there needs to be more editing
, but yes, first person is bad on a persuasive essay.
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| Author: | RonIC GiRL [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 1:55 am ] |
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http://www.gigasize.com/get.php?d=9fmmy2ls4vb |
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| Author: | Nevermind [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 2:02 am ] |
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Not bad, could use a little grammatical editing. |
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| Author: | Mr.orange [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 9:03 am ] |
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what is it? |
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| Author: | cornholio [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 10:45 am ] |
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is it pr0n? |
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| Author: | cornholio [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 10:49 am ] |
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actually yes, i was reading the introduction and there was a few errors on it. (LOL latino helping on english :S) Ill give you a copy of what should be changed. Horay for peer editing |
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| Author: | cornholio [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 11:07 am ] |
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http://rapidshare.com/files/59317244/PLASTIC_SURGERY_PROJECT..doc Here you go, i edited the introduction with red marks. Also, is it an essay you need to turn in? Cause essays are suppose to be in first person. Other than its good. |
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| Author: | Display [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 11:18 am ] |
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There supposed to be in third person, especially a persuasive essay (it makes it more persuasive to not include "your" opinions directly). Also, I really wouldn't consider using the Bold Arial Black size 14 font. I would try using less bland, repetitive words and use better, sophisticated grammar and language. Also you tend to make the essay informal - baddddd for school; your not talking to your friends, your talking and trying to convince your teachers why to a) show why plastic surgery is bad for teenagers & b) convince your teacher that you deserve an A because of your well written work. All in all, it needs a lot of work (imo, my standards are quite high tho...). |
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| Author: | cornholio [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 11:27 am ] |
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now that i look what i edited there needs to be more editing , but yes, first person is bad on a persuasive essay.
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| Author: | AWOL Soldier [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 11:47 am ] |
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Haha, I have an essay that they WANTED to have us write in first person, then they turned around on us and said, "You have too many 'I's in there!" Fuckers. |
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| Author: | bob [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 2:27 pm ] |
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she made an a, thats all that matters. |
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| Author: | Reaper [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 2:28 pm ] |
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Ive never wrote that much in my life and Im in my last year of High school... You Americans write too much. |
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| Author: | The Wonderguy [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 4:40 pm ] |
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???? |
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| Author: | Display [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 5:06 pm ] |
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Reaper wrote: Ive never wrote that much in my life and Im in my last year of High school... You Americans write too much.
you've got to be kidding me... |
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| Author: | Reaper [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 5:09 pm ] |
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Hell no. |
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| Author: | The Wonderguy [ Sun Sep 30, 2007 5:37 pm ] |
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???? |
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